Review for partner naritive

Editing Questions: Narrative

Name of Reviewed Individual: Akosua Antwi

1. What are the strengths of your partner’s essay? Why? She was very descriptive and really let the reader in to what her thoughts and belifs are.

2. What areas could use improvements? In other words, what suggestions can you give your partner that will help his/her paper improve? Give more example of the times she was talking about

3. What is your favorite literary device used in your partner’s essay? imagery
4. What is the part of the paper that stands out as the most "catchy" or important?
I liked how i could picture the situations she was decribing

Helen Keller Narritive - Questions

Answer the following:
1. What did you think of this narrative? I thought it was ispirational and stong that a small girl could find so much pleasure in figuring out everything had a name.
2. What was most interesting or engaging about it? Hearing everything from her point of view was interesting because we dont look at the world in the same way she did.
3. What surprised you?
The fact that Helen Keller was so aware of her surroundings despite the fact that she was 6 years old and blind and deff.
4. Did this change your outlook on Helen Keller at all? Why or why not? Yes it showed me she was aware and not just "blind and deff" in the world, the fact that she knew everything going on she just needed a way to express it.
5. Copy and paste three examples of vivid detail and imagery that helped enhance the story
1.Have you ever been at sea in a dense fog, when it seemed as if a tangible white darkness shut you in, and the great ship, tense and anxious, groped her way toward the shore with plummet and sounding-line, and you waited with beating heart for something to happen?

2.The afternoon sun penetrated the mass of honeysuckle that covered the porch, and fell on my upturned face.

3.I knew then that "w-a-t-e-r" meant the wonderful cool something that was flowing over my hand.

6. How can a narrative be more engaging than something like a biography? Why is it important to get someone's personal perspective?  For the fact that it is there personal perspective, its important to get that because everyone persives things differently and someone writing a biography on a person didnt live through it as the subject did.
7. Make a bulltted lists of some things you could write a narrative about
~ 1st expierence in the mental hospital
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Where I'm From

I am from abuse and dysfunction

Home to home

I am from beatings, rape, and demeaning words

That makes u feel so alone

I am from tears, fears, and screaming

All night long

I am from hospitals, padded rooms,

And drugs to make u calm

I am from medication, no escape

And pealed paint on the walls

I am from struggle, happiness,

Fear and strength

I am from hopeless thoughts

No way out, any escape

I am from many schools, teachers,

Friends and classmates

I am from four high schools

Where friends don’t last

I am from Grandmother and Granddad

Toasted Marshmallows, hot chocolate

And singing songs

I am from a fireplace with burning logs

Brought in from the cold winter nights

You could say I’m from the bad

But I will turn myself good

The past is gone

And my future is bright